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Flash Fiction: “My Trick-or-Treat Bag”

Here is my flash fiction entry for this week’s challenge.

Halloween, Chad? WTF?!

Yeah, yeah. I know it’s still August, but I wanted to imitate the retailers and bring out the Halloween stuff now.

Anyway, I hope you like it.

 

My Trick-or-Treat Bag

The side of my head slammed onto the musty floor of my bedroom, a jolt of pain ripping through my skull. I didn’t have a chance to see if my thin vinyl skeleton costume had ripped after my dad shoved me; luckily my plastic mask with the elastic band was safely on my bed.

“I told you to stop hounding us about goddamn trick or treating, didn’t I? DIDN’T I?!”

I looked up at him, glimpsing the Jack-o’-lantern decoration behind him that my mom had put on my door. A hissing black cat, part of the combo pack that she bought at Walmart last month, looked out over us from the wall above my top bunk. I loved waking up to the sight of it each morning, building up to the big night of trick-or-treating.

My dad expected my answer immediately.

I nodded quickly. “Yes,” I said in a panicked whimper.

“Speak up, goddammit! Act like a man for once in your pathetic life!”

The thing was, I wasn’t a man. I was a 7 year old who lived in horror of when his dad’s next tantrum would come. It was like being in the middle of the calm sea in a row boat, not knowing when the next big storm would threaten to dump me out.

Dad, I love you, I wanted to say. We all do. Mom, Michael, Sarah. But I didn’t dare. It would have made things so much worse to speak out like that.

He picked up my plastic orange trick-or-treat bag with the cut-out handles that we had gotten for free at the mall. A grinning Jack-o’-lantern sat on top of the block letters that spelled out Safety First.

“You think you’re going trick-or-treating tonight? Huh?!” He pulled the bag apart like it was tissue paper.

Tears dripped down my face. Through my blurred vision, I watched my dad throw the pieces of my bag at me. I wiped my eyes with my costume sleeve, the chemical smell of vinyl strong against my nose.

“Get up, you piece of shit!” My dad kicked me in my thigh, the nerves screaming out and shooting straight to my brain. I yelped like a defenseless dog.

“George! You’re hurting him!” It was my mom’s high, pleading voice. Knowing that she would be my dad’s new target for a while, I cried harder.

My mom’s intrusion made him even angrier, but instead of hitting her, my dad grabbed a clump of my brown hair and pulled upward with the strength of his 220-pound flabby frame. With my head and leg throbbing, I leaped up to stop the excruciating pain that covered my scalp.

“George, stop it! You’re acting like a crazy man!” she screamed, pulling at my dad’s thick arm.

I dropped to my knees, too frightened to stand up. The pieces of my trick-or-treat bag littered the floor near me; the half that read Safe and displayed half of the Jack-o’-lantern’s stretched-out face covered part of my Hot Wheels race track. I wanted to disappear into the cardboard grandstands and watch from there, hidden among the tiny spectators.

Did he really just slap my mom’s glasses off and grab her around the neck? The scene before me had a dreamy, yellowish tint to it, like our backyard looked right before that tornado passed over our town last summer.

I didn’t know why my mom purposely stepped in the path of the beast that lived inside my dad. She always ended up getting hurt worse than me.

My younger sister and brother were hiding somewhere, probably in her room behind her dresser. I didn’t blame them; I hid on my top bunk whenever my sister got in trouble, which wasn’t as often as me. I guess I was worse than her.

I should have let my mom eat dinner in peace instead of asking her twice about trick or treating tonight. It was Halloween, though, and my classroom party today made me even more anxious about going around the neighborhood with my mom and sister, complete with our costumes and flashlights.

My dad grabbed my arm and yanked me to my feet. I felt his powerful fingers dig into my skin. With his other hand, he pinned me to the upper sideboard of the bunk bed by my throat. Instead of feeling pain, I felt embarrassed wearing my costume at that moment, like the sissy that my dad always called me.

“Why are you such a dipshit? Huh?!”

I got a whiff of my clean, crisp bed sheets as my dad’s grip tightened. I tried to say I don’t know. I’m sorry, but no matter how hard I tried, the words did not come out of my mouth.

“Answer me, goddammit!”

I was upsetting him even more, and I couldn’t help it.

“George, you’re going to kill him!”

The grip on my neck loosened, and I collapsed on the floor, coughing and clutching my neck. I heard repeated slaps and then my mom started bawling. If I ever found myself inside a real haunted house, I bet the ghosts would sound just like that because it was the most chilling sound that I knew.

The flat ding of the doorbell echoed from the cheap speaker in the hallway. Some little kid was standing on our porch with a smile beneath his mask, maybe holding his mom’s hand – or his dad’s.

I wouldn’t know because I stayed in my room the rest of the night until my mom sneaked in later to tuck me in, sobbing the whole time. She let me wear my costume to bed with my grinning skeleton mask beside me on my pillow.

The periodic sound of the doorbell and the fear of my dad bursting into my room again kept me awake for a while. I clutched my mask and waited for sleep to come.

  1. August 10, 2011 at 6:04 pm | #1

    what a sad story! This is the first one I’ve read, of the many posted, that didn’t make me go “argh! really? This is the best you can do?” I truly wanted to knock the dad upside the head with a bat then kick him in the balls.
    I want to say “love it!”…. but, no. It’s too real to love. Or enjoy?
    so, I’ll just say “great job!” this is only the second story I’ve liked (other than my own…shh, let me enjoy a little narcissism) of all that I’ve read.
    thank you

    • August 11, 2011 at 2:30 pm | #2

      Thank you so much, Lily! You really made my day! That is one of the best compliments I’ve ever received about my writing.

  2. August 10, 2011 at 7:57 pm | #3

    Good, good stuff. Real. Harsh. And–apologies to those who wrote a contrived torture story–not contrived.

    • August 11, 2011 at 2:32 pm | #4

      Thank you! Perhaps I cheated a bit since my story was based on true events; it wasn’t entirely fiction… but don’t tell Chuck! :)

  3. August 11, 2011 at 2:18 am | #5

    Agreed, one of the best. This is dark, thought provoking and well written.

    Excellent.

  4. August 11, 2011 at 8:37 am | #6

    No Halloween? That is torture.
    Also I loved, “the beast that lived inside”. Great imagery.

    • August 11, 2011 at 2:34 pm | #7

      Hey, thanks!

      It was actually hard for me to write it since Halloween means SO much to kids.

  5. August 11, 2011 at 8:21 pm | #8

    Wow. Just wow. I feel like crying. As Lily said, this is way too real to love, but it’s absolutely fantastic. This is so much more traumatic than anything else I’ve read, and not just because the protagonist is a child. Really well done. (And that’s coming from someone who wrote a contrived torture scene!)

    • August 12, 2011 at 9:06 am | #9

      Thank you, Jo. I really admire your writing (especially “Wish You Were Here”), so your feedback means a lot to me!

  6. August 12, 2011 at 12:09 am | #10

    Good story. As others have said, too real, too close to home to love. i don’t know why women put up with this stuff. I guess it sneaks up on them. They’re trapped, and it’s too late.
    Real life torture that conditions the next generation of torturers.

    • August 12, 2011 at 9:00 am | #11

      Thanks, Louise!

      I think you’re right: Women get trapped, and it’s too late. Unfortunately, the children have to suffer as well.

  7. August 19, 2011 at 11:10 am | #12

    This one struck a nerve, almost made me cry. Such a good job writing in the boy’s perspective. Amazing.

    • August 19, 2011 at 6:14 pm | #13

      Thanks, Lindsay! Seems like my serious stories get better responses than my satirical ones. Oh well!

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